Blue Fairy

hi personally i don't think there is much to criticise because the words and discriptions are great but the order of some of it doesn't flow as much as it ...

firstly, i think you missed out the word 'of' in between smell and lilac in the first line. you say the room is peaceful and serene and then you say ...

hi i've realised quite a few mistakes but they can be fixed quickly like: siad- said In 3007, a century from now Isn't 3007 a millenium away- 1000 years away ...

hi 'It feels like a different field with a different feeling-with a different guy' this doesn't really make sense. What about something like- A different feeling towards a different man ...

this poem i wrote isn't very good how could i improve it Feeling like you've lost a friend You sit alone Waiting for something But your not sure what Sitting ...

The gentle snow twisting gracefully like a ballerina comes to land to rest on a hard bed of stone

im confused. that amount of characters packed in too that much writing has lost me. maybe you could make the starting longer and spend a paragraph on each two people ...